Yazdığım İngilizce şiir nasıl olmuş?

Yazdığım İngilizce şiir nasıl olmuş?

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Twilight​

I’m looking at moon,
Waiting for death
— which is soon,
Night is home for moon,
Elsewhere, all is doom
— for the this Moon.

Sun’s rising with light
— which is a lie,
It’s burning all my mind
— which is supposed to be mine,
— where only fantasies can be alive.

And then,
The Sun is rising, who I met,
I don’t even know it well yet,
But,
My heart is coloring, fluttering
— in this set,
Even It hasn’t show yet.

The Moon is lighted with light
— which is from its hair,
My heart isn’t dark in the dark, even in night,
— like in a fairytale,
But, which is there in all life,
It says that we cannot unite,
We see each other only at twilight,
And that is life,
It always knows surely from the start…

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